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Table chart show the percentage of people 65+ in three different countries from 1988 to 2030.

Table chart show the percentage of people 65+ in three different countries from 1988 to 2030.
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 how many
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old people
65+in
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65+ in
 three countries between 1988 and 2030 .
Overall
 , as it can be clearly seen
that
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in the table , there was a downward trend of people 65+ in 1988 in each area .
However
 , there will be an upward trend in Canada , Germany and
UK
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the UK
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 in 2030 .
According to
 the given information , in 1988 , they never overtook the 20% in each three
country
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. In the next period ,in 2000 , there was
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increased
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perconts
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of
 25% in Germany , Which was the lowest
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percentage
 in both Canada and
UK
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the UK
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 . In reference to the given data in the table , in 2030 , will be rose to 30% in Germany .
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 the category , the lowest proportion will be in UK and Canada ( 20% - 26% ) respectively .
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