Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over the fact that
politicians
should bear accountability for environmental preservation in lieu of individuals since their alterations are not powerful enough to impact our
environment
. In my opinion, even though
politicians
play
such
a paramount
significant
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role, there is an undeniable fact that individuals’ influences should put a premium on environmental quality.
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a shadow of a doubt,
politicians
are able to make tremendous contributions, to be more specific,
politicians
can urge the authorities to validate new laws against actions that pose a threat to the
environment
.
For instance
, one of the major factors catastrophically exacerbating the ecosystem is petroleum-based plastic
such
as bottles or bags, and
this
can be ceased as long as the government bans all companies from using non-biodegradable plastics, and
also
encourages them to use eco-friendly materials
instead
.
Hence
, that’s the reason why
politicians
are of necessity to the
environment
.
While
the essence of the
politicians
to the
environment
is widely acknowledged, it is unfair if ordinary
people’
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contributions are neglected. And
this
probably
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because through small, everyday actions, many a little makes a mickle. Particularly, Singapore where people take advantage of hybrid vehicles
such
as bio-friendly bicycles and cars making alternative sources of energy
instead
of traditional ones.
Therefore
, not only has it so far helped to reduce a massive amount of toxic exhaust fumes, but
also
enhances
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air quality. In conclusion, I agree that the people who have political empowerment should put
premium
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on our environmental protection, but they can not deal with all the problems occurring simultaneously.
Therefore
individuals’ awareness and actions can make
a
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immense contribution to protecting our
environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental protection
  • responsibility
  • politicians
  • individuals
  • large-scale
  • policies
  • regulations
  • impact
  • corporations
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • resources
  • expertise
  • collective efforts
  • difference
  • combination
  • crucial
  • effective
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