You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him which team won • Describe the weather conditions that day • Say how you felt about the match
Dear Mickey,
How are you ? It has been a long time
after
your accident we unable to catch up . Well ! I have great news for you which might change your mood Change preposition
since
that
we won Correct word choice
apply
final
match of cricket yesterday. As you know , we are playing Add an article
the final
match
from Correct article usage
a match
Correct article usage
the punjab
punjab
side and Change the capitalization
Punjab
other
team is from Srilanka . Both the teams well played and we won by 20 runs .
We had Correct article usage
the other
lot
of fun even though Change the article
a lot
weather
Correct article usage
the weather
condition
Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
is
so bad . Coach Wrong verb form
were
need
to stop the match in between Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
due to
heavy rainfall ,so, it continue
after 3 hours . After 3 hours , both the teams play enthusiastically .
Change the verb form
continues
while
playing in
the field , Change preposition
on
we
all Correct pronoun usage
apply
team
members were so energetic and Correct article usage
the team
supporting
each other . I felt amazing playing with Wrong verb form
supported
other
team too because they are very strategic with balling and their ballers are so fast but we won Correct article usage
the other
at the end
of the match . After match
Correct article usage
the match
finish
, we took Wrong verb form
finished
photograph
with Correct article usage
a photograph
trophy
and we all missed you in the match . Add an article
a trophy
the trophy
Dont
worry , I know you miss playing but Correct your spelling
Don't
i
promise we will play in Change the capitalization
I
next
match . Get well soon.
Lots of love,
RoopCorrect article usage
the next
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Task Achievement
To improve your task achievement, ensure that each part of the letter's prompt is addressed fully. While you mentioned the game's outcome and described the weather conditions, expanding more on how you felt about the match would provide a more balanced response.
Coherence & Cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, work on organizing your ideas more clearly and transitioning smoothly between them. Using paragraphs effectively to separate different topics and employing a variety of linking words can enhance logical flow.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve logical structure, try to plan your letter before writing. Each paragraph should introduce and develop a single main idea, which will make your letter easier to follow.
Coherence & Cohesion
Regarding the greeting and close, ensure your letter feels complete by starting with a more personalized greeting and ending with a well-wishing close that matches the informal tone of your letter.
Task Achievement
In terms of the suitable writing tone, your letter is appropriately informal, which fits the context of writing to a friend. You can enhance this by using expressions that convey empathy and support, recognizing your friend's absence more significantly.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.