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the table below information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

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The table provided shows information about five European
countries
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sales
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in
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of
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 Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in
five
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a
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years
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five-year
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 period from 1999
untill
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until
 2004.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the
table
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UKs
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UK
 citizens are the highest purchasers
for
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of
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 Fairtrad-labelled
coffee
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 than other countries.
while
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,
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 Switzerland people prefer to spend
there
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 money on Fairtrade-labelled
bananas
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. In
term
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 of
coffee
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sales
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, UK
sales
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has
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 increased drameticly from 1.5
million
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 to 20
million
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throghout
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throughout
 the given period, despite
that
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 fact in 1999 the
domenat
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dominant
 country was Switzerland at 3
million
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.
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, it
got
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doubled to 6
million
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.
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, the other three
regoins
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regions
 have experienced slight growth. Switzerland
tend
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tended
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 to consume more
bananas
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 in 2004
which
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when
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there
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sales
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 accounted for 47
million
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. Unlike the
sales
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 of Fairtrad-labelled
coffee
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 for Sweden and Denmark
were
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increased,
bananas
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sales
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 have dropped from 1.8 to 1
millilon
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million
 and from 2 to 0.9
million
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recpectively
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respectively
.
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