The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the amount of
coffe
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coffee
and tea consumed or bought by some Australian citizens.
Overall
, it can be seen that
persons
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people
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prefered
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prefer
to go to a cafe
for drinking
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to drink
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coffe
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coffee
or tea as opposed to
bying
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buying
being
instant or fresh
coffee
in all five cities.
In addition
, people in Melbourne drank their
coffee
and tea in a
coffee
shop more than their counterparts in mentioned cities. Looking at the details, the figure for individuals who went to a cafe in Melbourne, peaked at approximately 63%,
while
this
figure for citizens of Adelaide was the lowest rate among all cities at just under 50%.
Also
,
while
in Hobart about 53% of city residents bought instant
coffee
in 4 weeks, the percentage for Sydney was a little above 45%. As
regard
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regards
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to
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apply
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bying
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buying
bring
being
fresh
coffee
,
less
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fewer
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humans were eager to buy
them
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it
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.
Hence
, in Brisbane and Adelaide, the ratio for it was around 33%, which is a negligible amount. But in Sydney, people showed more interest in
bying
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buying
being
them, so the figure rose to 43%.
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