The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart gives information about the amount of

coffe

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coffee

and tea consumed or bought by some Australian citizens.

Overall

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, it can be seen that

persons

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people

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prefered

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prefer

to go to a cafe

for drinking

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to drink

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coffe

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coffee

or tea as opposed to

bying

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buying

being

instant or fresh

coffee

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in all five cities.

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, people in Melbourne drank their

coffee

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and tea in a

coffee

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shop more than their counterparts in mentioned cities. Looking at the details, the figure for individuals who went to a cafe in Melbourne, peaked at approximately 63%,

while

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this

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figure for citizens of Adelaide was the lowest rate among all cities at just under 50%.

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while

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in Hobart about 53% of city residents bought instant

coffee

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in 4 weeks, the percentage for Sydney was a little above 45%. As

regard

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regards

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apply

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bying

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buying

bring

being

fresh

coffee

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less

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fewer

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humans were eager to buy

them

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Hence

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, in Brisbane and Adelaide, the ratio for it was around 33%, which is a negligible amount. But in Sydney, people showed more interest in

bying

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buying

being

them, so the figure rose to 43%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

177 words

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasizes that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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