The given bar chart shows the difference of the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian cities between 2001 and 2006.‏

The given bar chart shows the difference of the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian cities between 2001 and 2006.‏
The diagram illustrates the comparison of the share of international students among university graduates in various Canadian cities from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that
although
all states experienced an increase in
this
trend, British Columbia had the widest gap. Meanwhile, the lowest rate was
Ontario
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in Ontario
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. The highest percentage of
this
data was New Brunswick with more than 5% in 2001 and around 15% in 2006. Nova Scotia and Quebec showed the same rate in 2001, but Quebec only rose by 3% which makes it below the previous state.
Although
Alberta and British Columbia share the same position, British Columbia increased significantly to reach more than 10%
as well as
Nova Scotia.
On the other hand
, Manitoba, Newfoundland
and
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Labrador, and Ontario were the lowest cities
who
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had study abroad pupils,
accounted
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at
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for
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below 5% in 2001.
However
, those areas witnessed a slight rise;
finally
, they arrived at approximately 6%, but Ontario was lower than the other two groups.
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