Some people think that men and woman have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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that
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and
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have a lot of
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different
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,
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so that main
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better for
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males
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and other
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.
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their
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boys or girls. If
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really good at that
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men
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the same talent and qualities so when
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between
men
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, a few
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companies
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should prevent
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jobs
. It can be true in some
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countries
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just because of
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their
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that some
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close to
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a weightlifter and some
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both of
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are mainly for
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a different qualities
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a different quality
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between
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and
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but certain
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on their
directions
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life.
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that many other
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require
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females
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just as much as
men
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