Some people think that men and women have different qualitíe, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
some believe that there are disparities in the types of job compatible for males or females owing to their distinct physical and mental strengths. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
view. This
essay will discuss my viewpoint with detailed reasons and relevant examples.
On the one hand, in state-of-the-art
world Correct article usage
a state-of-the-art
between
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apply
men
and women
occasionally have distinguigh
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distinguish
distinguished
about
which jobs they work. Change preposition
in
Due to
the sexism from the past, people normally thought that men
will
do laborious jobs Wrong verb form
would
whereas
women
prefer
white-collar to Wrong verb form
preferred
blue collar
. To illustrate, in Add a hyphen
blue-collar
china
some Capitalize word
China
women
worked in same
position in the company Change the article
the same
nonetheless
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nonetheless,
male
would Fix the agreement mistake
males
be consider
to promote Change the verb form
be considered
on
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at
higher
level than Add an article
a higher
women
. Moreover
, women
had to try hard work to achieve this
situation but men
accupy
because company Correct your spelling
occupy
leardership
believed that Correct your spelling
leadership
men
would be worthy, however
they did Add the comma(s)
however,
job
worse than lady like Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
accosociate
. Correct your spelling
associate
This
is why the sexism between two
Correct article usage
the two
gender
will continue.
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genders
On the other hand
, with the development of machines, men
's advantages in physical strength will gradually disappear, which means that heavy physical work that is
only suitable for men
will gradually disappear. For example
, miners, constuction
workers, farmers, etc. These jobs will be replaced by machines and robots in the near future. Correct your spelling
construction
Therefore
, jos
that are only suitable for both genders, Correct your spelling
jobs
such
as computer programmers.
In conclusion, there still
some truth to the aforementioned Add a missing verb
is still
dispanty
in job selection, I think Correct your spelling
disparity
men
and women
are now equal in terms of such
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear logical structure throughout the essay; each paragraph should focus on a single main point that contributes to the overall argument.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction and conclusion to frame your essay. The introduction should present your viewpoint clearly, and the conclusion should summarize your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with relevant examples. Strive to make the examples more detailed to effectively illustrate your argument.
task achievement
Address the task directly, ensuring your essay fully responds to all parts of the prompt.
task achievement
Develop your ideas comprehensively, making sure your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Use more specific, detailed examples to support your arguments. This enhances the persuasiveness and relevance of your essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
