Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. TO what extent do you agree or disagree?
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many
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that many
jobs
that suitable for men or women Use synonyms
whereas
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this
phenomenon would not be the same with Linking Words
others gender
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other genders
due to
the different Linking Words
of
qualities. Change preposition
apply
This
writer agrees with Linking Words
this
statement and will discuss Linking Words
throughout
the essay.
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it throughout
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, there is no doubt that Linking Words
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jobs
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job
choosing
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choices
demands
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demand
on
humanities and characteristics. Men have abilities to follow Change preposition
apply
rule
and self-control nicely, so that the kind of Fix the agreement mistake
rules
jobs
that need to Use synonyms
create
or Wrong verb form
be created
apply
formulas which is chefs or maybe engineers. Oppositely, women are careful and industrial that why they can Wrong verb form
applied
multi-tasking
and work well with calculating Correct your spelling
multi-task
such
as Linking Words
many
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in many
jobs
like accountants or managers. Easily to see that fields are split out between two genders.
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about
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apply
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jobs difference
related to physical base. The muscle and powerful body of the men made them suitable not only for blue but Fix the agreement mistake
job differences
also
white-collar Linking Words
working
suffering from stressful environments and working nightshifts. Honestly, women’s constitutions are usually fit and flexible helping them with standing Replace the word
workers
on
beauty industries or Change preposition
in
restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
hotel
. There was a little Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
of
exception in many conditions but it is always Change preposition
apply
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a rights
rights
in my Fix the agreement mistake
right
countries
.
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country
into
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apply
jobs
between two groups of gender because of the mental and physical differences. Use synonyms
Sometime
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Sometimes
this
statement is not totally correct but there is still the Linking Words
existent
of it around the world.Replace the word
existence
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