The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts information about the comparison of caught
fishes
in Perth, Australia, between locals and imports from 2004 to 2014. Fix the agreement mistake
fish
Overall
, for a decade, the local fishermen provided the citizen
with more fish than the imported ones.
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
To begin
with, looking in detail at the data, in the first year domestic were successful catches
2677.7 metric Replace the word
successfully caught
tons
, whilst non-domestic only 464.5. Hereafter, steady increase in local catches throughout the period until reached a peak in 2008 with 8136.2 metric tons
. In contrast
, the imports of fresh fish had massive fluctuations between 2004 and 2008, although
the highest number in 2012, 227.3
metric Add a missing verb
was 227.3
tons
, then
dropped to 782.7 in 2014.
To sum up
, in the total of metric tons
for 10 years, the local ones always had a step ahead of the imports. However
, if we could sum up both of the catches of fresh fish, the highest number was in 2009, 8949 metric tons
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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