The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts information about the comparison of caught
fishes
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fish
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in Perth, Australia, between locals and imports from 2004 to 2014.
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, for a decade, the local fishermen provided the
citizen
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citizens
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with more fish than the imported ones.
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with, looking in detail at the data, in the first year domestic were
successful catches
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2677.7 metric
tons
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, whilst non-domestic only 464.5. Hereafter, steady increase in local catches throughout the period until reached a peak in 2008 with 8136.2 metric
tons
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, the imports of fresh fish had massive fluctuations between 2004 and 2008,
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the highest number in 2012,
227.3
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was 227.3
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metric
tons
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,
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dropped to 782.7 in 2014.
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, in the total of metric
tons
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for 10 years, the local ones always had a step ahead of the imports.
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, if we could sum up both of the catches of fresh fish, the highest number was in 2009, 8949 metric
tons
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons with synonyms.
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