Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of car ownership than advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.
Nowadays, every citizen
have
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has
negative
argument about automobile ownership rather than Add an article
a negative
the negative
the
positive perspective. Correct article usage
a
On
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In
this
essay, I will elaborate both opinion
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opinions
of
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on
this
issue.
On the one hand, the automobile give
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gives
convinience
and freedom of movement to every Correct your spelling
convenience
people
. Firstly
, every individual do
not need to Change the verb form
does
attached
Add a missing verb
be attached
with
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to
public
transportation schedule. They can Correct article usage
the public
do
commute without Unnecessary verb
apply
worry
Add an article
the worry
of
the Change preposition
about
last
train to the suburb or they can depart earlier in the morning to office
or airport without waiting Correct article usage
the office
the
first bus Change preposition
for the
operated
. Change the verb form
to operate
Secondly
, private vehicle owner
can do everything they want without Fix the agreement mistake
owners
disturb
anyone around. Change the verb form
disturbing
For example
, they can sing a long
on the road without making Correct your spelling
along
people
uncomfortable.
On the other hand
, there are many disadvantages belong the usage of personal vehicle
. In the first place, air pollution is the biggest concern of Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
this
problem because it need
to burn some gasoline and produce dirty smoke Change the verb form
needs
to
the sky. Change preposition
in
Furthermore
, pollutant
can Fix the agreement mistake
pollutants
make
serious health Verb problem
cause
problem
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problems
for
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in
a
long term Correct article usage
the
especially
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, especially
on
the lungs and heart. Change preposition
in
Lastly
, traffic jam is another outstanding problem for every driver especially
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, especially
on
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during
the
rush hour. Mental health will be impacted because Correct article usage
apply
person
who Add an article
the person
a person
drive
a car Change the verb form
drives
more
likely to have stress and depression during Add a missing verb
is more
journey
on the road. Correct pronoun usage
their journey
Moreover
, during the jam people
will waste their productive time and it can make people
unproductive.
To conclude
, automobile
can Fix the agreement mistake
automobiles
give
Verb problem
have
good
and bad impact Correct article usage
a good
for
society. In my opinion, Change preposition
on
people
need to deep check what they need before buying a car because there is
many advantages and disadvantages for society and themselves.Change the verb form
are
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Grammar
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Structure
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