Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

In recent times, vary of
choices
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has been
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controversial. Some people
are believe
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in its negative
potentials
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potential
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. As far as I am concerned, we cannot
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divide
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of
choices
into negative and positive categories. We should consider that each matter has
potential
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the potential
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of both negativity and positivity at
same
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the same
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time.
To begin
with,
matter
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a matter
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of
choices
on each level
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on either morality or personal obligations. To clarify, media is one of the sectors which has brought us
variety
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a variety
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of
choices
. Some are
abiddened
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forbidden
to follow as governments set them in terms of illegal roles.
Whereas
, there are numerous fields
have
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that have
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no specific role and individuals should
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choose
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and follow by their moral borders, as in social media which offers both benefits and
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, which can lead to
drawback
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drawbacks
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at the same time.
On the other hand
, even if people
be
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ethic
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on
this
matter, there would be some others who can easily
froud
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forgive
, and have no regrets
on
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about
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their actions. In
such
cases, two main
approach
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could be considered.
Firstly
, those who have no morality should be ignored by society and be left over.
Secondly
, authorities have to set more practical and strict roles for those who
not
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do not
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conform to be caught. In conclusion,
modern
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the modern
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world has brought us
nomerous
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numerous
choices
. Each of which contains the potential of best and
worse
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worst
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to
chose
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choose
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.
Thus
, If there is no role to be
commited
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committed
personally is better to consider them as personal obligations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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