Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.

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society believes that
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guardians and friends are the best mode of learning about
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agree on the fact that personal
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excellent choice,
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when humans try to learn by themselves
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qualities. The most prominent benefit of working alone to get
life
experience
is that it helps the public to do things in their personal way whether
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it is wrong or right and after they get
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results out in their hand
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clarification, in which field they
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improvement.
For instance
, Rohan struggled a lot to get
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in Ratan Tata's company, he made various business proposals several times but the first two business models
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not correct and he kept trying and got selected as the vice-president with his third model for the oil refining plant. The reason he
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successful was because he kept learning from his errors.
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is working alone
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creative manner. As they can find out about their strengths
as well as
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weaknesses
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Therefore
, they can work on those to improve and make themselves a better person with improved qualities.
However
, the primary advantage of gaining
life
experiences through
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help is that they can provide a broader perspective on
life
and can
also
help people to prevent making common mistakes in
life
.
This
assistance could save the time and energy of their loved ones and they can allocate that time
as well as
vigour in some other useful fields.
Moreover
, gaining
life
experience
from those who already faced that era could assist in improving the
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quality of individuals.
For example
, Mukesh Ambani followed his father's suggestions and did chemical
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engineering
and with his family's
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he is the second richest man in
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because he always made correct decisions in
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ideas and followed a right and smooth path for the success.
To conclude
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life
experiences through family and
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support or through personal experiences both have
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own pros but as I mentioned above, I think individual
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better path to choose for
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future.
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Task Achievement
Ensure you provide a balanced analysis of both views before stating your own preference. This will make your argument stronger and show a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Coherence & Cohesion
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General
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • pitfalls
  • informed decisions
  • trials and errors
  • impactful
  • memorable
  • foster
  • resilience
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  • anecdotal evidence
  • theoretical
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