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Some people think increasing the cost of fual is the best way to solve global environmental problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #cost
Over the
last
 few years,the number of people who prefer to
fuel
 has increased significantly.
Although
 there are several advantages of
fuel
,it can have some disadvantages
as
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and
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 a conclusion. On the one hand,there are several benefits of
fuel
 increase.The first merit of it is considered to be
that is
 the income from
fuel
.For
enstance
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, nowadays,
peolpe's
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people's
 demands for
fuel
 are increasing, because the number of people in our country is increasing year by year, so the prices of
fual
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fuel
 are increasing.Another positive aspect is
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 to be that solving these global
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problems
,
This
 is because if we do not solve
this
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problem
,it will eventually lead to many things.
One
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 the other hand,despite
mentioned
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 positives it
also
 has its downsides.One of the major disadvantages of it is that harms the environment.
For example
,it emits foul
odors
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 and poisons
person
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.Another important demerit is
that
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 expected price.
This
 is because many people may not always be able to afford it. In conclusion,
while
fuel
 can offer several positives there may be some
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 too.From my personal point of view,
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of
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this
 will
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out weigh
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on creating a clear and logical structure for your essay. Start with an introduction that clearly states your viewpoint, followed by paragraphs that support your stance with explanations and examples, and conclude with a summary of your argument.
Task Achievement
Make sure to answer all parts of the task. Your essay should directly address the prompt, explaining your position regarding increasing fuel costs as a solution to global environmental problems. Provide more focused arguments and relevant examples to back up your views.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the cohesion of your essay by using linking words and phrases effectively to connect ideas within and between paragraphs. This will help the reader to follow your argument more easily.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your arguments. This will help make your points more persuasive and your essay more comprehensive. Reference to studies, statistics, or hypothetical situations can strengthen your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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