The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart compares
education
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of
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pieces of information
full
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full-time
time
and Use synonyms
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part
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part-time
time
courses.
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Overall
as presented in the diagram, the number of men in Linking Words
further
studies Linking Words
have
some fluctuations Correct subject-verb agreement
has
whereas
there is a gradual increase in women’s Linking Words
education
.
Now turning into the detail, almost a million male Use synonyms
students
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have
enrolled in higher Unnecessary verb
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education
in the period of 1970-71 which Use synonyms
has
dropped to merely 8.5 Unnecessary verb
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lakhs
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students
in 1980-81 and again purged by approximately 50 thousand Use synonyms
students
in 1990-91 as Use synonyms
full
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full-time
time
course. Use synonyms
According to
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part
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part-time
time
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education
, there is Use synonyms
slight
increase in all Add an article
a slight
the
three periods.
It is interesting to see Correct article usage
apply
rise
in women’s Add an article
a rise
further
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education
where there is no decline in both Use synonyms
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part
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part-time
time
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full
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full-time
time
studies compared to men. Here the number of Use synonyms
students
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have
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apply
clined
from roughly 7 Correct your spelling
cleaned
lakhs
and 1 lakh in 1970-71 to 11 Use synonyms
lakhs
and 2.5 Use synonyms
lakhs
in the period of 1990-91 in full Use synonyms
time
and Use synonyms
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part
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part-time
time
respectively.Use synonyms
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