The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart compares

education

pursued by men and women in Britain

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three academic years including

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regarding

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and

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courses.

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as presented in the diagram, the number of men in

further

studies

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some fluctuations

whereas

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education

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enrolled in higher

education

in the period of 1970-71 which

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dropped to merely 8.5

lakhs

students

in 1980-81 and again purged by approximately 50 thousand

students

in 1990-91 as

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time

course.

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time

education

, there is

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increase in all

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three periods. It is interesting to see

rise

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in women’s

further

education

where there is no decline in both

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time

and

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time

studies compared to men. Here the number of

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clined

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from roughly 7

lakhs

and 1 lakh in 1970-71 to 11

lakhs

and 2.5

lakhs

in the period of 1990-91 in full

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time

respectively.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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