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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT UNPAID COMMUNITY SERVICE SHOULD BE A COMPULSORY PART OF HIGHSCHOOL PROGRAMS. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Most people think that voluntary community service must be mandatory for secondary students as a part of their curriculum. Which I strongly agree with and support. Making community service a must for high school scholars has a lot of benefits and advantages. First of all, it will be a great learning experience for them because they will be exposed to new, and out-of-their comfort zone places. Working in a library, firehouse, long-term care, and agricultural field will give them a new perspective and better understanding of what the workforce does in each section.
Secondly
, it will help the learners to gain new skills in the process of being in a different environment.
For example
, working in a small-town gift shop as a part of the tourism department helps them in their communication skills when dealing with a customer,
also
 teamwork and camaraderie finishing all the tasks given to them in a timely manner. With
this
 new gained and honed learning they will be ready for the future when they enter their career life.
Furthermore
, discipline is
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developed when students are in a work set-up, they need to follow protocols and rules.
In particular
 being on time for the job, respecting the authorities, following the chain of command, and finishing tasks assigned on a deadline gives them a sense of responsibility as well. Equipped with all traits they will become a better person.
To conclude
, including unpaid community service as a compulsory part of the learning program for the
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 gives a great advantage for the learners.
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