Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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, with the availability of more portable communicatable devices.
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a gap between human interactions and
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communications.
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. To commence with,
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used to share their ideas and knowledge with each other
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each other ,and most of the youngsters were used to
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to develop their
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the advancement of mobile phones and other electronic
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of fancy apps, nowadays
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as a better method to develop
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is adding new features
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to keep their clients interested
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their application.
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shifted the old physical contact
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created a gap between human
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living in the same house now used to drop a
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to communicate with each other and some
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children who are living in the same house , when the dinner is ready.
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of physical interactions at present
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family members apart from each other.
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on online
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carries the risk of blackmail and
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2023 December report 1000 girls reported usage of
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photos and communications in in appropriate websites.
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by their lovers.
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. In conclusion, present
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are used to
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and carries the risk of being a victim of internet crime. As
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with each other
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as a negative
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Expand your introduction by providing a clearer overview of your position and how you intend to support it throughout the essay. This will help set the stage for your argument and make it easier for the reader to follow.
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Increase the range and accuracy of your vocabulary to clearly express your ideas. Consider using synonyms and more specific terms related to technology and relationships.
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Ensure a logical flow between paragraphs by using a wider range of cohesive devices (such as conjunctions, transitions, and pronouns) to link ideas within and across paragraphs. This will enhance the readability and cohesion of your essay.
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Develop your main points with more detailed explanations and more varied examples. This will deepen the reader's understanding of your argument and show a thorough consideration of the topic.
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Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and ensure correct sentence structure. Pay particular attention to subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and punctuation.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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