The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given pie chart compares the percentage of allocating
time
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to different activities by adults in a given country between 1958 and 2008 years. It is clear from the graph that the dominant parts of both graphs were sleeping and working
whereas
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travelling to work and other activities as similar as hobbies, playing and sport were the
least
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last
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ones.
According to
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1958, working and sleeping were nearly the most interesting amusements for that moment
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sleep mode dropped from 32% to a quarter for the period,
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employing increased from 33% to 42%, making it the most popular. Another general tendency is that, in comparison to 1958, teenagers decreasingly spend
time
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at home.
In particular
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, 2008 witnessed a slight growth in the relaxing
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section from 8% to 13%, respectively. The amount of young learners who hung out with their friends declined to 6% in 2008. Meanwhile, the rate of
time
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spent on other activities was identical to
time
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spent on travel to work, at 8%
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