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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the way at the moment the
water
 supply system in Australia and plans to
change
 in the
future
.
Overall
, the
future
 has been
change
Correct article usage
the change
show examples
 recycling of wastewater from dumped to the
river
change
 to treatment
water
Change preposition
of water
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 and using again. In the present
water
 system, it can be seen that the wastewater has been transferred to
water
 treatment plants by Dam, storage and
also
 households, factories, shops and cities, respectively. Meanwhile, pure
water
 goes straight from storage, or
Dam
Fix the agreement mistake
Dams
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 transferred into
such
 as households and factories and so on
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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according
in
Change preposition
to
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 the figure.
In addition
,
storm
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stormwater
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water
 from
shop
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shops
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 and cities and so on has transferred
direcly
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directly
dampef
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dumped
damper
 in
Add an article
the river
a river
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river
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rivers
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. Moving to the
future
, how to solve
about
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apply
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damping
storm
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stormwater
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water
 into the
river
.
Fitsly
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Firstly
, in the
future
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future,
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 they
has
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have
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 been
change
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changes
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 in the ways of
storm
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stormwater
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water
 from damping
river
change
 to that treatment and
recover
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recovery
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 using
into
Change preposition
apply
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for example
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
factories and households again.
Thus
,
this
 is a plan
in
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the
future
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, change, future, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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