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Some people says that instead of preventing climate changes we should find with it. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #changes
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Nowadays, a lot of people
work
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hours
 and
leaving
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 little time for leisure activities. Hard
working
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 gives opportunity to
growth
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grow your
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carrier
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career
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, earn more money and self-realization. From my point of
view
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 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, there are provided
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 environment for
work
 currently.
In
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mostly
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 offices provided by kitchen, gym, gaming room, massage room etc. During
work
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 it can be
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to spend some time
for
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 another activity to earn some energy.
Also
, it is
pleasure
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 to
work
 with
team
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the team
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 in
good
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 atmosphere for one purpose.
Secondly
, many people want to achieve success.
This
 idea makes hard
working
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 interesting. There are a lot of histories about founders
that
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work
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 longer
hours
 and became
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success
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.
For example
, Elon Musk and Paypal. Paypal
the
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 result of good
idea
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ideas
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 and hard
work
. After the project
implementation
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implementation,
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 Elon Musk got a lot of resources for different
him
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ideas.
To sum
up
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 peoples
work
 longer
hours
due to
 it
provided
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wonderful
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the wonderful
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 environment and they want to reach success.
However
, nothing forces people
work
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 longer
hours
 and do not
spent
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 time
for
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 leisure activities. It is
choosing
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 of each man.
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task response
To improve task response, ensure that your essay directly addresses the question asked. Include a clear thesis statement in your introduction that outlines your position. In your case, more explicit argumentation directly linking your views to the topic question would enhance clarity and relevance.
coherence and cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, organize your ideas more logically and make use of linking words to smoothly transition between sentences and paragraphs. While some structure is present, clearer paragraphing with distinct main ideas in each, followed by supporting details, would strengthen your essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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