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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the
number
 of
students
 in the UK who
were
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graduated and were postgraduated but
not
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did not
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 go into full-time
work
 after leaving the university in 2018. The figure gives the
number
 of
students
, both graduate and postgraduate.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
figurs
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figures
figure
 of both's who worked after graduated and
postgraduated
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postgraduate
post graduated
postgraduates
 about voluntary
work
content
 around 345 and 3,500
respectivetely
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respectively
 In
the
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figure
one
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1
, the
number
 of who were graduates has
plan
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 to study in the
fiture
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future
figure
 29,665 in 2008. Meanwhile, the graduate
students
 who were part-time
work
 after leaving the university
content
 17,735 in 2008.
In
addition
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 the
number
 who
unemployment
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unemployed
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has
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was
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content
 16,235 less than
who
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those who
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 were part-time
work
 after leaving
at
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the university. Turning to the chart of postgraduate
students
. It can be seen that the
number
 of
who
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those who
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 working part-time
work
compare
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compared
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 with
who
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those who
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were
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apply
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plan to
studying
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study
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 in the future
are
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apply
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found that there
has
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is
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content
 nearly.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, work, content with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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