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Some people are born to be leaders, while others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays,
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 are
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very common
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, from leading a country to leading small projects, but they are still
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. There is an opinion that says some
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 already have
leadership
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skills
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 when they are born,
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 others consider
leadership
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 can be achieved from learning. In
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 essay, I’ll discuss both views and give my opinion about
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 assessment. On the one hand, it is undeniable that some
people
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 are born to be
leaders
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, and are often good at inspiring and leading large groups.
Leaders
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 require credibility, motivation, proactiveness,
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 and confidence.
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, Winston Churchill,
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 president of the United Kingdom, had a
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skill
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 when he was a child, and he
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 his
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 in some strategy games.
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,
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 who have
borned
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developed
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skills
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 are mainly extroverted
people
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, so they are better at leading than others.
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, families with
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 who are leading may teach their talent to the next generation.
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, training
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skills
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 is not impossible for anyone who really wants to achieve it. They can train
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skill
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 in a suitable environment, with the right
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 to observe and instruct them. They can learn some necessary
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 as communication, change management, or even learning from courses, resources, and lessons from successful
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.
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skill
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 can be trained,
practiced
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 and experienced over time.
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, a person who wants to learn to become a leader needs to have the right environment, and a good tutor to learn from and fix their mistakes. In
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 modern day, many schools provide the environment to train the leading
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skill
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 by doing group discussions, or leading small projects for students to experience and practice
leadership
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skills
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. In conclusion, the
people
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 who have
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skills
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 when they are born are talented
people
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, but
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skills
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 are possible to be trained and achieved. So I agree that
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skills
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 can be trained, not just from talent.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Work on creating more direct and relevant introductions and conclusions. The introduction should clearly state what the essay will discuss and the conclusion should summarize your main points and opinion succinctly.
Paragraphing & Main Ideas
Develop each paragraph around a single main idea. Use topic sentences at the beginning of paragraphs to clarify their main focus to the reader.
Specific Examples
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