1.The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
The given bar graph indicates the
chagnes
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changes
change
about
average expenditures of people's income on Change preposition
in
the
weekly basis in a certain nation in both years Correct article usage
a
in
1968 and 2018.
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apply
Overview
, the percentage of spending money on food Change preposition
In overview
was
significantly decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
while
the rates of expenditure on housing, transport, and leisure were Linking Words
markly
increased Correct your spelling
markedly
at
the same period. Change preposition
in
However
, Linking Words
ther
items Correct your spelling
the
remined
Correct your spelling
remained
on
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in
the
similar manner in both researched years.
Looking first Correct article usage
a
of
all the proportions of the major fluctuations, the Change preposition
at
proprotion
for food presented Correct your spelling
proportion
the
more than a third in the first given year, which was the biggest portion in 1968. Correct article usage
apply
However
, it had a massive drop almost Linking Words
a
half of them in 2018. When it comes to the ratio of Correct article usage
apply
hosuing
, transport, and leisure, they were Correct your spelling
housing
in
Change preposition
at
the
similar level just near 10% in 1968. Correct article usage
a
However
, the percentages of housing and transport Linking Words
expreienced
a double increase in 2018 Correct your spelling
experienced
while
people used more money for their downtime Linking Words
for
more than twice in 2018 compared to 1968.
Moving to the other data, the figures Change preposition
apply
of
fuel Change preposition
for
and
power and personal items Correct word choice
apply
were
declined Unnecessary verb
apply
just
below 10% in 2018 which Change preposition
by just
were
a mere drop, Correct subject-verb agreement
was
while
Linking Words
clothes
and Correct article usage
the clothes
shoes's
figure was a significant drop which was a half. Interestingly, the household items Change noun form
shoes
was remained
at the same point.Change to the active voice
remained
has remained
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