Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places?

Currently, there is an increasing number of tourists
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visiting some places which have difficult conditions
such
as
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the Sahara
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desert or the
antartic
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Antarctic
. I believe
this
activity provides advantages
such
as memorable and unique
experince
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experience
experiences
and educational
opportunities
.
In contrast
, it
also
gives a drawback
especially
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in terms of
health
risks and limited
accesibility
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accessibility
.
Firstly
, many individuals tend to go out of their comfort zone by visiting several sites that are so appealing. I believe that activity produces some benefits,
such
as giving memorable and unique experiences.
Unique
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structure of
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landscape attracts visitors to record
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their cameras. It will become priceless memories as we see that
dessert
and the
arctic
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offer a
dramatical
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lighting. The beautiful photos are recorded
also
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grow an artistic inspiration for those who have talent in
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.
Then
, different
view
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from
this
place
will enhance our mental
health
due to
give
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opportunities
for
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ourselves
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to explore and charge
the
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energy by exploring several beautiful
place
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although
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that
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have difficult conditions.
In addition
, the
unique
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of
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dessert
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desert
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and arctic
condition
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conditions
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allows educational and research
opportunities
. The
place
like
dessert
,
arctic
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and arctic
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support visitor in enhancing their knowledge. They
also
becomes
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a
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valuable sites for several
science
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such
as geology and geography to do scientific research.
Secondly
,
besides
several benefits that are mentioned earlier, there are
also
many
drawback
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behind
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visiting a
place
that
have
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hardship conditions as
dessert
and
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the arctic
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arctic
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.
For example
, exploring
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towards those
place
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will give you a
health
risk
due to
long
trip
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trips
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. There are many common
health
problems that are
face
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by visitors,
for instance
, dehydration, heart stroke,
hypotermia
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hypothermia
and sunburn are common
ilness
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illnesses
in
harsh
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environment
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environments
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in
dessert
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the dessert
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and polar regions. In order to overcome these issues you have to
have
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guarantee safety during the trip.
In addition
, difficult
sites condition
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site conditions
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in
dessert
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desert
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and polar regions provided
a
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restricted
accesibility
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accessibility
such
as public facilities or internet signal
due to
geopolitical,
enviromental
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environmental
regulations and logistical constraints. Limited public facilities
such
as transportation and
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infrastructure
infastructure
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infrastructure
can
further
limit the number of visitors In conclusion, visiting a remote environment
as
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such as
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the dessert
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dessert
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desert
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and
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the arctic
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arctic
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will give both benefits and drawbacks. The advantages are memorable and unique experiences and educational and
reserach
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research
opportunities
.
Menawhile
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Meanwhile
the drawbacks are the existence of
health
risk
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risks
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and
limites accesibility
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limited accessibility
.
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  • conservation efforts
  • economic benefits
  • environmental degradation
  • habitat destruction
  • safety risks
  • extreme weather conditions
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  • high price tag
  • specialized equipment
  • influx
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