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The charts below how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurents between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The charts below how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurents between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The chart provides information about the
frequent
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frequency
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 of the amount of fast
food
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 consumed in the USA from 2003 to 2013
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, there was a downward trend in the
commonly
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common
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people
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ate
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eating
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 fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 in United
State
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States
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.
In addition
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, the amount of
people
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ate
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who ate
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 once a week registered the highest figure
throughtout
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throughout
 for most given of the period, which peaked in 2006.
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, the proportion of consumer spending to
ate
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eat
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 fast
food
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 every day accounted for the
lowesr
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lowest
lower
 percentage
in
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apply
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all the time. In 2003 and 2006, the consumption of recurrently
people
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 ate fast
food
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 once a week
has
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had
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 the highest number
of
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apply
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that time
which
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apply
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peaked
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peaking
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 at 33% and in 2013 there was a
rapidly
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 fall of 5% to 28%.
Consumer
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Consumers
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 who
bought
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buy
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fastfood
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fast food
ounce
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once
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 or twice a month
has
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had
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an
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a
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dramatically
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dramatic
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 fluctuation in
all
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apply
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the
period
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periods
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,
started
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starting
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 at 30% and
then
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 sharply
fall
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falling
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 to 25% and
peak
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peaking
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 at
the
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its
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 highest in 2013 at 33%.
Customer
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Customers
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buy
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buying
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 fast
food
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 several
time
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times
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 a week witnessed a
slightly increased
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slight increase
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 of 3% to reach 20 percentage
point
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points
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 between 2003 to 2006, followed by a significant fall to 16% in 2013 In the first year of the given period, spending on fast
food
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few
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a few
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 times
a years
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years
a year
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 gradually increased by 2% to reach 15% between 2003 and 2006 before
reamaining
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remaining
 stable in the next 7 years. The figure
of
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for
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percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of
people
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ate
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who ate
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 fast
food
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 every day and never
have
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had
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thr
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the
 same fluctuation with the former started at 4% and
then
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 marginally decreased to 3% before remaining stable
to
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until
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 2013. The data for the latter
allocate
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allocated
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 5% before
declined
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declining
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 to 4% and
stable
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was stable
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 until 2013.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • decade
  • trend analysis
  • frequently, occasionally, and rarely
  • significant changes
  • lifestyle modifications
  • health awareness
  • economic factors
  • public health implications
  • fast food industry
  • broader implications
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