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You are looking for a full-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. Introduce yourself Explain what sort of job would like to do And say what experience and skill you have

#job #advertisement #sort #skill
Dear Madam I am writing to you
express
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to express
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 my interest in your job advertisement for
assistant
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an assistant
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 that I saw posted on the local village board. Before my
privious
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previous
 job was
clean
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cleaning
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 the shop, I
look
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looked
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 at
mall
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the mall
a mall
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 at the shop and
soetimes
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sometimes
 I helped the boss. I noticed that
this
 is a
part time
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part-time
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 job. But my preferred days for working would be
tuesday
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Tuesday
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,
thursday
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Thursday
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 and
saturday
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Saturday
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 afternoons and evenings. Because I
studies
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study
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other day
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another day
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. I would be available until late at
might
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night
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 on those days and I would
also
 be able to work two
saturdays
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Saturdays
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 of each month.
Then
although
 I am a recent graduate my look at
mall
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the mall
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 and
helped
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helping
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 the boss will make me an excellent. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Please let me know
of
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if
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 you require
an
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any
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further
 information. Yours faithfully Mushtariy
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structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, detailing your intention to apply for the job, a body that outlines your qualifications and experiences relevant to the job, and a conclusive statement that reinforces your interest in the position.
formatting
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or sections of your content. This will improve readability and help the reader understand the structure of your essay.
content
Develop your main points further by providing more detailed descriptions of your previous job experiences, skills, and how they relate to the job you're applying for. Providing more specifics will strengthen your argument for why you are a good fit for the position.
grammar
It's important to proofread your essay to correct any grammatical errors and ensure that your sentences are complete and clearly convey your thoughts. Consider using tools or resources to help with grammar and sentence structure.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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