Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sport stadium. They should spend more money on medical care and education. Do you agree or disagree ?
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state
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the state
have
not spent money from Change the verb form
has
tax
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taxes
for
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on
sport
and art Fix the agreement mistake
sports
constractions
, Correct your spelling
constructions
contractions
construction
instade
of Correct your spelling
instead
this
government
should put money Correct article usage
the government
for
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into
education
and medicine system. In Correct article usage
the education
this
essay
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essay,
this
statement and give examples from my own life.
It is undeniable that,
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apply
education
and health level of Correct article usage
the education
nation
has Add an article
the nation
a nation
main
role. Change the article
the main
However
, we need some buildings where we can see art and do some Fix the agreement mistake
sports
sport
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sports
exersice
. Correct your spelling
exercise
Availibility
and number of Correct your spelling
Availability
such
buildings like stadium
and Fix the agreement mistake
stadiums
theather
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theatres
has
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have
great
impact Add an article
a great
to
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on
health
of citizens. Add an article
the health
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, if there are nomeruos
of Correct your spelling
numerous
sport
center
, Change the spelling
centre
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the residence
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will exercise every day. Because people do not want Replace the word
residents
spent
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to spend
many
time and effort Correct quantifier usage
much
to
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on sports
sport
action, if sport
town a far. Nowadays people like Change the noun form
sports
convinientce
and closeness so in Correct your spelling
convenience
such
case
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cases
authorites
can increase Correct your spelling
authorities
condition
of health.
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the condition
to
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apply
theate
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that
this
place serve
not only Change the verb form
serves
like
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as
enterteiment
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entertainment
center
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centre
,
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, but
also
serve like one of the wonderful place
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places
of
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in
city
. Many Add an article
the city
town
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towns
of
their Change preposition
to
theatres
buildings.Change to a genitive case
theatre's
theatres'
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, there is theather
which places in Berlin has many visitors and serve one Correct your spelling
theatre
buitiful
sight of Berlin. Many people Correct your spelling
beautiful
wants
to see Change the verb form
want
such
constraction
and Correct your spelling
construction
willing
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are willing
pay
money for that. Fix the infinitive
to pay
That is
why, government
have to pay Add an article
the government
attantion
to constract Correct your spelling
attention
such
biuldings
.
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buildings
To sum up
, sport
town and Change the noun form
sports
theathers
has Correct your spelling
theatres
good
influence Correct article usage
a good
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on residence
residence
and visitors.Replace the word
residents
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your introduction and conclusion are clear, presenting your viewpoint on the topic and summarizing your main points effectively.
Task Achievement
To fully address the task, ensure your essay provides a balanced discussion on why government money should or should not be spent on theatres and sports stadiums, including your own viewpoint.
Task Achievement
Clarify your ideas by expanding on them with specific, relevant examples. Avoid general statements by providing more detailed evidence or personal experiences related to the topic.
General
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Word Count
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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
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