The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.
the line graph
depict
the information about medical Change the verb form
depicts
patients
which were visiting hospitals of four different clinics over Use synonyms
an
Change the article
a
six
Add a hyphen
six-year
year
Use synonyms
periods
between 2010 and 2016
after the analysis, it is clearly stated thatCorrect the article-noun agreement
period
,
the individuals who were visiting for birth control had Remove the comma
apply
major
ratio Correct article usage
a major
in
the Change preposition
at
Correct your spelling
beginning
begaining
of the Correct your spelling
beginning
year
at about 275 after Use synonyms
increased
for two Wrong verb form
increasing
Use synonyms
year
, Change to a plural noun
years
then
the number of Linking Words
patients
for birth control saw Use synonyms
massive
drop and hit its lower point and gradually Add an article
the massive
enhaced
it to about 250 in total, Correct your spelling
enhanced
enhance
in contrast
, eye checking Linking Words
patients
had maintained the third spot in 2010 but the growth of eye patient rise up and straight on increasing for four years (2012 to 2014) Use synonyms
thus
, the pattern never changed Linking Words
it
direction and sky Change the pronoun
its
rockted
to 350 Correct your spelling
rocketed
rocked
patients
in Use synonyms
last
Linking Words
year
Use synonyms
furthermore
, the number of population visiting diabetic were most lower and gradually Linking Words
rise
up in the Wrong verb form
rose
year
Use synonyms
of
2012 Change preposition
apply
then
, after a small dip it went Linking Words
on increasing
to almost 200 Change preposition
to increase
patients
for Use synonyms
diabetic
, Fix the agreement mistake
diabetics
on the other hand
for dental Linking Words
patients
, it saw a major drop in 2012 Use synonyms
then
went on increasing and remained steady in the Linking Words
last
Linking Words
year
(2016)
Use synonyms
overall
, it is vividly manifested that the number of Linking Words
patients
visiting for eye Use synonyms
Add a hyphen
check-up
check
Fix the agreement mistake
checks
up
had Change preposition
apply
large
in population for weekly Correct article usage
a large
check up
and birth control remained a second spot in weekly Add a hyphen
check-up
visit
to Fix the agreement mistake
visits
clinic
Correct article usage
the clinic
moreover
, dental had Linking Words
lower
ratio in totalCorrect article usage
a lower
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