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You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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caused by the population increase commencing in the 19th century by the given map. From an
overall
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, it can be seen that the most changes both in residential areas and transportation ways occurred after 1970. By a closer examination, it is obvious that between 1868 and 1883, there was only a small area near the main road that
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 from north to east. In the next 29 years, a new housing area was created aligned with the previous one and in 1909, the railway passed through it. What’s more,
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 railway which started from west to east had a conjunction with the main road. From 1922 to 1970, the new area expanded transversely in the direction of the Railway.
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 the end of that era, they erected a motorway on the other side of the village which led to the
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 of several residential areas in the vicinity of all transportation ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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