The graph below shows changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.

The graph below shows changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.
The bar chart demonstrates the proportions of
household
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that possessed
car
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cars
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in one Europe country in the interval between 1971 and 2001.
Overall
, the
percentage
of families that had cars witnessed an upward trend,
while
the proportion of households that owned no
car
declined in the given period.
In addition
, houses with no
car
was the most popular at the beginning but was surpassed by one-
car
owner
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the end of the interval. At
first,
the proportion of households voided of private cars
initially
dominated at around 48%. In the next two decades, it decreased significantly by approximately 18%.
Then
the
percentage
fell slightly from almost 30% to 28% in 2001.
Furthermore
, the
percentage
of families
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that had one
car
indicates a
strongly decreased
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from about 47% to 21% in the first twenty years.
However
, the proportion rose dramatically in 2001 and resulted in around 43%. Meanwhile, the
percentage
of
household
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possessed
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two or more cars rocketed at the beginning first two decades and peaked with
the
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percentage
about
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47%.
Then
it experienced a
suddenly declined
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by
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approximately 28% by the end of the figure.
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