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The chart below shows the changes in percentage for household cars in a European Country between 1971 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in percentage for household cars in a European Country between 1971 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Provided is the bar graph comparing the percentage of
cars
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car
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 ownership in a European nation’s households being surveyed across 3 decades from 1971. As is shown, there was a visible shift in car possession through the years as families began to purchase more automobiles;
however
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, they preferred to have a solitary vehicle rather than multiple ones in the garage. With an in-depth look at the first decade, it is evident that the proportion of households voided of private cars
initially
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 dominated at around 5%, but was progressively reduced by roughly 1% a decade later.
Following
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this
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 bracket were houses owning a single vehicle at approximately 3.5% in 1971, which
subsequently
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 saw a slight reduction
by
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of
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 0.5% in 1981. Interestingly, the percentage of families with multiple automobiles bucked the trend with the climb from well below 2% from the start to about 3% within 10 years. Moving forward to the second half of the diagram, the figure for
one-car
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the one-car
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 bracket not only jumped to a staggering peak of 5% in 1991 but
also
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 equalized that of the no-car
group
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 2 decades past. As the new century ushered in, the growth decelerated by 1%.
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, the figures for
multiple
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the multiple
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 cars
group
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 regained
its
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their
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 momentum after experiencing a 1% dip from 1981 to 1991 yet lagged behind the one-car
group
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, ending at about 3% of
total
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the total
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.
Lastly
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, the data for
no-car
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the no-car
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group
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 remained
plateau
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plateaued
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 in the
last
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 decade,
also
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 at 3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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