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the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The line graph presents how much fish, lamb, beef, and
chicken
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 were consumed by people living in European countries from 1979 to 2004. It was measured in
grams
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 per person per
week
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.
Overall
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, people eating seafood remained steady throughout the years.
Whereas
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, the consumption of meat decreased over the years
while
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chicken
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 consumption gradually increased during that period. Both beef and lamb consumption decreased by about 100
grams
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 per
week
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 between 1979 and 1984. After that year, the amount of meat being consumed slightly fluctuated and decreased by half in 2004. In 1979, each person in Europe consumed almost 150
grams
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 of
chicken
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 on average per
week
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. After that, the trend of eating
chicken
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 substantially grew each year and it almost doubled by 2004.
On the other hand
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, people in Europe didn't eat much fish when compared with meat and
chicken
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. The amount of fish being eaten is only around 50
grams
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 per
week
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 for the whole 25 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, grams, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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