Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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believe that going to the

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for watching

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films

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, would be useless because

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can see them on their

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or tablets. others say that to be fully enjoyed with saying the

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,

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should go to the

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. In

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viewpoints. On the one hand, those who believe that they can see

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on their

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rather than going to the

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have several ideas.

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, they could save

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by watching the

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on the electronic devices. As

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don’t need to devote a considerable portion of

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time

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to planning for going out, they would have extra

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. They usually should arrive

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cinema

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At least 3 hours in advance to book a seat, which can be very

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-consuming.

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, they can save

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. because

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who would like to go

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the

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should spend a great deal of

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in order to fill up their car with petrol which is very expensive. If

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can see

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films

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on

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phones

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, they will avoid

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wasting their

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for

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expensive fuel.

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, some

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State several reasons for going to the

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. They can see the

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on the biggest screen which can be very enjoyable. As it can give the

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a sense of excitement which can add to the pleasure of the film itself.

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is because the actors and other elements in the film are bigger than usual. What’s more, they believe that seeing the feelings

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other

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in the

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could be more enjoyable than other ways of seeing a film. Because a lot of

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are present in the

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which could create the sound by encouraging a character or shouting. Dysfunction can be energizing which leads

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to

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a sense of more satisfaction. in conclusion, some

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say that they could save

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and

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by seeing the feelings on

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phones

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, others believe that the excitement of the biggest screen and other

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led to having more satisfaction I hold the view that going to

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with the more enjoyable.