The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages
In the
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The
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graph
it
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apply
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shows a graph from
scotland
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Scotland
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about the
Birth
rate
,
population
growth
rate
and
finally
death
rate
from 1940
al
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all
show examples
the way until 2020. We are given 3 statistics, from
scotland
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Scotland
show examples
over the years. it
also
gives us
persenajes
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percentages
personages
and the years from when they started to record until now. The 3 different statistics are all mainly going in a down word position. We can
se
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see
that the
population
growth
rate
increased in the
1960
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1960s
however
if
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it
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fell down from there very mildly all the way to the 2000's.The
death
rate
has
also
decreased more over it has started to
increse
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increase
reasonably. 3rd the
birth
rate
has
also
decreased
alot
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a lot
in
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In
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1940 it was
in
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at
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the
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apply
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2.5% but now in
the
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apply
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2020 it is in the 1%. The
birth
,
population
growth and
death
rate
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rates
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all started above
from
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apply
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where they are now,
Birth
started at
a
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apply
show examples
2.5
persent
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per cent
and perished
under
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at under
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1 percent. The
population
also
started under 1% and finished at almost
nule
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null
. the only one that
didnt
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didn't
chase
alot
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a lot
was
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apply
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was the
death
rate
witch
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which
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started
1.5
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at 1.5
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% and
finish
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finished
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at 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, population, death with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.

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