Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In creative industries, funding is crucial to

support

the work. There are several ways of funding; financial

support

from

government

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, self-funded and

another

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other

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alternative sources,

such

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as sponsored

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by private

companies

.

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essay will discuss the view of funding for

artist

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artists

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,

such

as painters and

musician

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musicians

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. To increase the industry of art,

government

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the government

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should give financial

supports

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support

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. By giving

this

,

artist

and musicians

has

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nothing to worry about financially. They can be more focused on creating the art.

Government

can

also

give

support

by giving chance for performers or event

organizer

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to collaborate with the

government

events.

On the other hand

, some people believe that

government

should not give

a

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full

support

to the industry, and use the funding on something more useful,

such

as health and education. They believe that

,

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there are many other alternatives to solve the problem. Many private

companies

might give

sponsor

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sponsors

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to

support

artist

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artists

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.

Although

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, it may be hard for

new-comer

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artist

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artists

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to get

support

from

the

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private

companies

. One other thing, they might need to do self-funding.

This

may be hard for some people to

sponsor

their self.

However

,

this

is

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might be beneficial for some people, because they are not relying

to

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on

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any other parties. In my opinion, both supports are crucial. If

artist

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artists

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can

mixed

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up all of the

fundings

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funding

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from

government

and private

companies

,

then

it can be more than perfect for them. Indeed it will be hard to get both, but

i

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think, looking for

sponsor

private

companies

is more

benefical

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beneficial

, as they are more reliable.