Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In creative industries, funding is crucial to

support

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the work. There are several ways of funding; financial

support

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from

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government

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the government

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, self-funded and

another

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other

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alternative sources,

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sponsor

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by private

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.

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essay will discuss the view of funding for

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artist

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artists

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,

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as painters and

musician

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musicians

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. To increase the industry of art,

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government

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the government

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should give financial

supports

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support

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. By giving

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,

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and musicians

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nothing to worry about financially. They can be more focused on creating the art.

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can

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give

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by giving chance for performers or event

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to collaborate with the

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events.

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, some people believe that

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should not give

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full

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to the industry, and use the funding on something more useful,

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as health and education. They believe that

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there are many other alternatives to solve the problem. Many private

companies

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might give

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sponsors

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to

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artist

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artists

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.

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, it may be hard for

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artist

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artists

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to get

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from

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apply

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private

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. One other thing, they might need to do self-funding.

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may be hard for some people to

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their self.

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,

this

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is

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might be beneficial for some people, because they are not relying

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on

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any other parties. In my opinion, both supports are crucial. If

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artist

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artists

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can

mixed

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up all of the

fundings

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funding

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from

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and private

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,

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it can be more than perfect for them. Indeed it will be hard to get both, but

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think, looking for

sponsor

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private

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is more

benefical

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beneficial

, as they are more reliable.