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The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given table and pie chart represent the number of people in
Australis
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Australia
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according to
 various nationalities and
environment
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environments
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.
Overall
, China has the highest percentage of people who live in the city area rather than the countryside.
However
,
other
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the other
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 three countries have the highest proportions of residents who live in
the
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apply
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urban than rural
area
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areas
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. In
term
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terms
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 of living area, Australians are most likely to live outside cities,
through
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though
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 80% still live in urban
environment
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environments
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.
Similarly
, 83% of Dutch
lives
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live
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 in downtowns and 17% in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
Besides
, New Zealand and British residents who survive in the city
center
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centre
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 have slightly the same proportions.
Finally
, 99% of Chinese live in the city
despite of
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for
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 some
reasons
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reason
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. The pie chart indicates
the
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that
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 73% of the Australian population
are
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is
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 made up
by
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of
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 Australians.
To sum up
, all demographics live overwhelmingly in cities, especially individuals from China.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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