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THE MAIN CAUSE OF GLOBAL WARMING IS POLLUTION FROM CARS. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#pollution #cars
IN
THIS
 MODERN ERA, POLLUTION FROM
CARS
 CAN BE THE MAJOR
CAUSE
 OF GLOBAL WARMING. IN MY SOLID OPINION, I PARTIALLY SUPPORT
THIS
 VIEW
THAT IS
 BECAUSE
BESIDES
CARS
, THERE ARE OTHER ESSENTIAL FACTORS THAT PLAY IMPORTANT ROLE IN GLOBAL WARMING.
TO BEGIN
 WITH, EXHAUST FROM
CARS
 CAN BE A VITAL
CAUSE
 OF GLOBAL WARMING.
THAT IS
DUE TO
 THE FACT THAT TODAY, RISES IN THE NUMBER OF VEHICLES ENTIRE THE WORLD DAMAGE SOME FACTORS WHICH ARE THE BEGINNING OF THE GLOBAL WARMING.
ACCORDING TO
 A SURVEY OF BELGIAN CITIZENS,
INSTEAD
 OF USING ELECTRIC
CARS
, INDIVIDUALS TEND TO USE
CARS
 WHICH WORK WITH GASOLINE WHICH DAMAGE THE ATMOSPHERE,
OZANE
Correct your spelling
OZONE
 LAYER, LAKES, AND FORESTS AND TRIGGERS OTHER DANGEROUS CAUSES. EXHAUST FROM
CARS
 AFFECTS BOTH FAUNA AND FLORA IN FORESTS, AND LAKES, AND INFLUENCES TO HABITATS OF ANIMALS. IF
THIS
 PROBLEM IS REMOVED FROM THE WORLD BY SWITCHING TO ELECTRIC
CARS
 OR PANEL
CARS
, ONE OF THE MOST VITAL PARAMETERS WILL DISAPPEAR FROM THE WORLD. REGARDING THE OTHER INCENTIVES, HUMAN ACTIVITY IS THE
CAUSE
 OF INCREASED GREENHOUSE GAS CONCENTRATIONS. SPECIFICALLY, THERE ARE SOME ACTS WHICH ARE TAKEN BY HUMANS THAT CAN
CAUSE
 GLOBAL WARMING.
FOR INSTANCE
, OVER THE
LAST
 CENTURY, THE BURNING OF FOSSIL FUELS LIKE COAL AND OIL HAS INCREASED THE CONCENTRATION OF ATMOSPHERIC CARBON DIOXIDE.
IN ADDITION
,THE BUILDING OF NEW FACTORIES OR BUILDINGS SHOULD BE THE VISIBLE PROBLEMS WHICH AFFECT TO ENVIRONMENT WITH THEIR WASTES. IN SUM,
ALTHOUGH
 IT SEEMS THAT
CARS
 ARE THE ONLY FACTOR FOR GLOBAL WARMING, THERE ARE SOME UNSEEN ISSUES THAT ARE CAUSED BY HUMAN ACTIVITIES.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Summary
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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