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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below shows the Anthropology graduates from one university after finishing their undergraduate degree course, and the table shows the
salaries
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 of the anthropologists in
work
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 after five years. It is noticeable that the chart depicts anthropology graduates
finished
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who finished
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 their undergraduate degree courses after their university studies. There are some types of
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 choices after they
graduated
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graduate
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. The highest figure is
the
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apply
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full-time
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,
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 52
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percent
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. The second highest number is
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part-time
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, by 15
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percent
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, and there is
37
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 d between full-time
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 and part-time
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.
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, the full-time postgrad studying
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 and the not knowing
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are
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 the same figure, by 8
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. The table shows the anthropologists’
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 in
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 after five years. The same anthropologists’
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 are between in the
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 of $75,000-$99,999 and the anthropologists’ salary is in the above
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 of $100,000, by 40
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. and freelance consultants of employment. The lowest figure includes the freelance consultants and the government sector, and the two
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 are in the
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 of $25,000-$49,999. Despite
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, the three percentages show that all
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 are in the
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,
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 as 10
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, 25
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, and 35
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, work, percent, range with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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