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The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009
The chart provides information about the number of
cars
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 manufactured in three different nations between 2003 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was an upward trend in the number of vehicles that were produced in
Argentina
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,
Australia
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 and Thailand. In 2003,
Australia
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has
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 the highest rate of
cars
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 that was produced (550),
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followed by
Argentina
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 with 400
cars
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 produced.
However
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, both
Australia
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 and
Argentina
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 experienced a dramatic decline in
cars
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 to 400 and 50 (2005), respectively. There was a rise in the amount of automobiles in
Australia
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 in 2009 (1119). From 2005 to 2009, the quantity of
cars
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 in
Argentina
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incresase
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increase
increased
 rapidly from
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 out to 1500 vehicles, surpassing
Australia
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 (1119) and Thailand (999).
Finally
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, a linear increase in
cars
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 was witnessed in Thailand, as it went straight from 161
cars
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 in 2003 to 999 in the end.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, argentina, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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