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The chart below shows below the percentage of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005

The chart below shows below the percentage of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005
Indicated in the provided graph is the information about the proportion of money spent between 1990 and 2005 in four nations on transportation and roads.
Overall
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, it can be observed from the graph that all figures experienced
an
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 downward trend.
In addition
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,
while
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portugal
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Portugal
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 was the
the
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percentage
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 of
transport
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 in Portugal was the highest,
UK
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The UK
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 was the country with
lowest
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the lowest
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 proportion of the budget allocated to roads and
transport
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. It can be seen from the graph that in 1990, the
percentage
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 of
transport
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 in Portugal was the highest
with
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at
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 26%, the amount of
transport
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 in Italy at 20%
fifter
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after
 the
percentage
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 of mobility in Italy in
byears
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years
 went down to 1.3%,
its
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 grew up with around 14%.
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, in
Portugal
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Portugal,
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 the
percent
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 of highways went down
with
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to
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 the bottom of 16% in 2005
In
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 the other hand, the
quantity
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number
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 of
transports
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transport
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 in
USA
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the USA
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approximately
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is approximately
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 the same. After roads in
UK
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the UK
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 in 1990 increased from 11% to 14% in 1995
its
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it
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 went down to nearly 6%. After that,
its
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it
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 rose to 1% in
final
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 year.
Moreover
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, in
USA
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the USA
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 the
amount
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number
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 of buildings in 1995 at 13% from 14%. Before
its
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it
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 reached 14.5 %v, the
percentage
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 of transportation in 2000 was at
the
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its
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 peak with nearly 15%

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, transport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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