You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. State what your skills and experience are. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
letter regarding your advertisement for voluntary
Add an article
a voluntary
the voluntary
job
which I saw last
week in the newspaper.
I have lived here for five month
and I could not get a Change to a plural noun
months
job
for myself. So I decide
to do some voluntary Change the form of the verb
decided
job
instead
of staying at home. I believe that by doing voluntary
Add an article
the voluntary
a voluntary
job
I can improve myself both in being discipline
at work and personal life and earn valuable experience by interacting with people. Wrong verb form
disciplined
Also
I can prepare myself for my future Add a comma
Also,
job
when I hire in near
future.
When I was living in my homeland, I decided to learn some general software. Correct article usage
the near
Besides
, I am a patient person and do not lose my temper so easily which I think is an important factor in your job
. In addition
, I work
in Wrong verb form
worked
coffee
shop as a cashier for one year so I am familiar with different Add an article
a coffee
the coffee
type
of people either good or Fix the agreement mistake
types
bad tempered
.
I prefer to work as a volunteer for at least 6 Add a hyphen
bad-tempered
month
in kindergarten because I love dealing with children Change to a plural noun
months
age
between 4 to 6 and I think they make Wrong verb form
aged
feel
I am still young and can tolerate my difficulties Correct pronoun usage
me feel
through
my life in future.
I look forward Change preposition
throughout
receiving
your prompt.
Yours faithfully,
Khashayar PartoviChange preposition
to receiving
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Task Achievement
To enhance task response, make sure to directly address all parts of the prompt clearly and thoroughly. Ensure that your reasons for wanting to do voluntary work, your skills and experience, and your preferred location and duration for volunteering are all distinctly highlighted and elaborated upon.
Coherence and Cohesion
A more logical structure could be achieved by organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each dedicated to addressing a specific part of the prompt. For instance, one paragraph for explaining why you want to volunteer, another for detailing your skills and experience, and a third for stating your preferred volunteering location and duration.
Task Achievement
Including a polite closing statement can improve the tone and formality of your letter. Additionally, it's important to proofread for minor grammatical errors and ensure that your letter follows a polite and formal tone throughout, suitable for a job application.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence, use transitional words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This creates a smoother reading experience and shows a higher level of language proficiency.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.