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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
Looking back on the
last
 two generations, our parents
receive
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the
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 education system
that is
 regulated to include both sexes. The pre-organized mechanism allows both male and female
students
 to understand each other better
as well as
 to create a better environment for the
students
 to come up with a variety of solutions when facing difficulties.
Therefore
, I strongly agree that universities ought to accept fair numbers of male and female
students
 in all subjects.
To begin
 with,
university
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 is a place where people learn.
In other words
, no one should be excluded or limited
to choose
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in choosing
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 what they want to take part in.
Also
, with equal sexes in classes,
students
 can exchange different ideas from
opposite
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 sex
that
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according to
 a study,
it
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stimulates
students
 to think. Next to go would be, no one can deny that universities are stepping stones of the fickle society. If a student
who
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go to a university that only
accept
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accepts
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 males or females, they
would
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will
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 not be
full
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fledge
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prepared
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 to deal with various problems that will be encountered after they graduate.
To sum up
, based on the abovementioned, history is the mirror of tomorrow;
thus
,
keep
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taking in the same amount of male and
females
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female
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students
 would accelerate
students
’ learning efficiency.
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  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
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  • compromise on quality
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