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Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an official international language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and cause a loss of culture. what are your opinion on this?

#people #language #countries #loss #culture
Few topics are more important than having a single
language
 as an official international
language
. And the issue of having a single
language
 will probably always be controversial. For better communication between
countries
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countries,
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 it is usable to have a single
language
 as an official
language
.
However
, it seems to me it can
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 a numerous issue because of a diversified culture. The main obstacle would appear to be the number of cultural
specificity
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specificities
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. By
this
, we mean that each country has a different exclusive specificity which is crucial to keep it.
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 can be seen, in each
countries
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country's
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languages
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language
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 has a number of moral lessons with a pithy maxim which can inform society with their own
language
.
For example
, in each
state
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state,
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 there are a number of
ritual
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rituals
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 or
ceremony
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ceremonies
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 which should
perform
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with
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the
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 specific
language
. By
this
, we mean that languages
is
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 the one thing that can transmit some heritage to the next generations. It is true that having a single
language
 as an official international
language
 has a lot of
virtue
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virtues
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 and it can be more suitable for society to
have
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better contribute
with
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to
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 other states,
despite
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apply
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this
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having a single
language
 as an official
language
 loss
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of tradition
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tradition
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traditions
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, beliefs and symbolic value. In conclusion, if each country had their own
language
, it would preserve
their tradition
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its traditions
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 and beliefs.
However
, some people have a frame of mine that having
single
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language
 as an official
language
it
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will be more effective for connection between countries.
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To improve task response, ensure your essay fully answers the question by presenting a more balanced view. While you've expressed a clear position, expanding on your reasons and providing more specific examples to support your argument would strengthen your answer. Try to clearly cover all aspects of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, work on the logical flow of your ideas. Each paragraph should smoothly transition to the next with clear topic sentences that outline what the paragraph will cover. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
To enhance your essay, consider refining your introduction and conclusion to more precisely state your opinion and summarise your main points. This will make your position clearer to the reader and provide a strong frame for your essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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