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Population of Countries of the European Union in 2021 by percentage

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The pie
chart
 compares the share of
population
 in
countries
 in the European Union in 2021.
Overall
, what stands out from the
chart
 is that the
population
 of Germany was responsible for the largest group of humans,
whereas
 the least among
seven
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the seven
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countries
 was recorded in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. With regard to the
chart
, the largest proportions of
population
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the population
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 were in Germany and France.
While
 the former ranked first with approximately slightly less than 20%, about 3 out of every 20 human beings in Europe live in the latter. As shown in the
chart
, Italy, Spain, and Poland shared nearly similar proportions and together were host to roughly one-third of
populations
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the populations
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 of the European Union. Focusing on the rest,
population
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the population
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 in
countries
, namely Romania and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, was almost the same, 3.9% and 4.3%, respectively. The remaining a little more than a quarter of
population
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the population
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 of the European Union was estimated
on
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in
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 other
countries
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the introduction briefly outlines the main points and the conclusion provides a clear summary of findings without introducing new information.
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Aim for a stronger, more varied vocabulary to express comparisons and percentages, enhancing clarity and impact.
coherence cohesion
Organize paragraphs logically, grouping related information to improve readability and flow. Consider using more cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

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