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he chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

he chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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The given column chart illustrates the
amount
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 of money which was spent on various item groups by different age categories of
people
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 who were living in the UK in 2004.
It is clear that
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 most
of
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the
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people
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spent
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 less money on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 regardless of their ages. Adults who were under 30 accounted for the least
amount
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 of expenditure on food and drink, and entertainment and
shows
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 almost the same
amount
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 for both these categories
although
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 expenditure on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 for
this
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 age category had
the
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a
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 dramatic number of almost 15%.
People
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 between 61 and 75
year
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years
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olds
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 showed
an
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the
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 opposite trend to adults who were under 30.
People
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 between 61 and 75 constitute the largest
amount
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 of expenditure on entertainment which is approximately 23%.
In addition
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,
this
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 group spend the least
amount
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 of money on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 in
compare
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 to other ages with
the
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a
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 negligible
amount
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 of under 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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