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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? -> google places

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Humans are becoming more curious about the places they live in, and they started to do some
search
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 to find out the historical past
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about
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 those places. The main reasons
of
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this
 are
internet
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the internet
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 and slow-living trends in society. In order to learn about those
phyical
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physical
 surroundings, individuals can ask older neighbours about the past they know. Some people try to practise "slow-living" to handle their complicated lives.
Although
 nearly all of us have to move, decide and live fast, some of us want to slow down and explore more about the things we
surrounded
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 by,
such
 as the biggest place we spend our lives, our homes. Despite the
internet
is
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 the main factor of fast living, it
also
 creates an artificial world
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in that
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that
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which
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 we exist
in
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it
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.
However
, putting our phones aside and doing little
researchs
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research
 about the history of the places we sleep in,
for example
, makes us more stress-free and
fullfilled
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fulfilled
 and many try to practise those feelings as a way of chillness. Everyone has neighbours who
is
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 older than
overall
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the overall
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 age rate of the building that they live and they usually have a great
knowladge
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knowledge
 about the history behind the place they all live. If someone is interested in the experiences that the
building
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 been through, asking about
it
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apply
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to
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elder neighbours is the best way to collect data about it because these people
with
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at
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 a certain stage in life
has
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 seen more than any of us.
For example
, doing an
internet
 search could give us wrong or inaccurate information but the
history
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historical
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 knowledge about an apartment comes from
real life
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 experiences and it contains more details.
To conclude
, the
internet
 and fast-living trends are forcing us to live in a world we do not actually want to live in and
as a result
 of that, many
wants
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want
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 to know about the past in the real world and the historical past
about
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of
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 buildings they reside is becoming more attractive day by day.
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Task Achievement
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