The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984. Write no less than 150 words.

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India 

in 1984. Write no less than 150 words.
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These two charts show us the difference between the age match of the populations of France and India in 1984. In the first chart, we are going to compare the amount of
females
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and
males
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average age in France. First of all, we can see that approximately there between 3.5 percent and 4% of the same amount of
males
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and
females
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who are in to same brackets between 5-10 , 0-5, 30-35, 40-45, etc.
However
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, for 85 years old or older, there are more
females
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than
males
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. In the second chart, we are seeing the same idea but coming from India. The chart shows 7 per cent (the maximum) of
males
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and
females
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going from 0 to 5 years old. And It is all equal on both sides for each age gap.
To conclude
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, we can see that in 1984 , India had a bigger population because of the number of
males
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and
females
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but there were equals on average. There is approximately the same number of
males
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as
females
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coming from 0 to 85+ years old. But in France, the population is way smaller with an imbalance of
males
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and
females
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. There are more
females
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than
males
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • age structure
  • populations
  • France
  • India
  • 1984
  • overall
  • different
  • evenly distributed
  • proportion
  • young people
  • elderly individuals
  • largest age group
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