The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production. Summarise the informationby selectingandreporting themainfeatures, andmake comparisonswhere relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the linear process of small-scale commercial
honey
production, consisting of various stages divided into two phases: starting with bees collecting nectar and ending with the delivery of the final product to consumption areas by humans.
In detail, during the initial stage of the bee phase, bees gather nectar from flowers and deposit it in a beehive to produce Use synonyms
honey
. In the subsequent step, the Use synonyms
honey
is dried on the surface of each comb. Use synonyms
Finally
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stage of the bee phase, bees clean the cells using their fan wings before sealing them with wax.
Regarding the remaining steps, Linking Words
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production shifts to the human phase, starting with the thorough collection of honeycombs. These collected combs are Use synonyms
then
flattened, and raw Linking Words
honey
is efficiently extracted and poured into a sump tank for heating at temperatures ranging from 45 to 50 degrees Celsius. Use synonyms
Next,
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is transferred to a sieve tank to remove impurities before being conveyed to settling tanks for storage for two to four days. Use synonyms
Finally
, after being packed into individual jars, the product is transported and ready for sale.Linking Words
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