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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The charts below compare consumed and
spended
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spent
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 resources by countries all over the
world
 and the distribution of
population
. It can be seen that the main expenditure of people in the
world
 is food
an
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and
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 transport.
While
 most people in the
world
 live in Asia, they consume far
less
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fewer
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 resources
that
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than
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European
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Europeans
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 and
American
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Americans
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. The first chart provides us with the categories of
world
 spending. People spend nearly a quarter of their money on food(24%).
Also
, 18% of their budget goes on transport. Housing accounted for 12% of the
world
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world's
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 expenditure, and only a tiny 6% of spending is devoted to clothing. The remaining of their budget is spent on others(40%). The second chart represents the distribution of
population
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the population
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. Asia has the
larget
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largest
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 proportion of
population
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the population
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 in the
world
(57%). In the next level, America and Europe are
equaly
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equally
equal
 the most populated continents, with each of them consisting
14
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of 14
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% of
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the world
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world
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world's
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population
. Only 10% of
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the world
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world
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world's
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population
is living
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lives
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 in Africa.
While
population
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the population
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 of Asia is nearly two times more
that
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than
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 that of America and Europe, the majority of all resources
is
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are
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 consumed in
USA
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the USA
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 and Europe(60%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • global spending
  • resource consumption
  • population distribution
  • key trends
  • leading consumers
  • correlate
  • disparities
  • significant
  • sustainability
  • economics
  • management
  • analysis
  • overview
  • implies
  • mismatch
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