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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvato ntages of this development? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience to support your arguments

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Introduction
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 no objective fact that
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 about
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studying
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 is prevalent in our reality because of its importance . Most people agree with
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 because of its many benefits. Some of the people highlight its
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disadvantages
 first. I would like to discuss
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this
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 of the
advanatges
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advantages
 and the
disadvantages
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 in my next paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
Describe different types of advantages I would like to mention the first and foremost advantage which
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makes
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the apportunity
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apportunity
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opportunity
 to study aboard and It become a good chance to
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communicate
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another students
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another student
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 the world. Another
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advantage
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of
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people might be
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the apportunity
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apportunity
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opportunity
 to know about other countries and cultures. So, there are different types of advantages that we can
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descuss
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discuss
now but I would like to
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discuss
 my next paragraph.
Body paragraph 2
On the darker
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, there are some
disadvantages
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 that make
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 problematic and worrying I would like to
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on
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 of the most important
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 which is when students
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 a university degree a board it
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 that students a nice chance to stay
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 country and
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 to work there which is cause of immigration. I think there are many shortcomings
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 that we can
to
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talk
all
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 the time but now I want to talk about my
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conclusion
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Body paragraph 3
Conluding
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naither
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neither
 its advantages
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the
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disadvantages
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Conclusion
In my opinion, the positive and the negative sides are mixed processes that follow each other and
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 should be considered more
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.
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, I remain the same opinion that the
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negative
 and the positive sides it is not necessary to ignore and outline their impact in reality.

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structure
Focus on structuring your essay clearly with an introduction, at least two body paragraphs discussing advantages and disadvantages separately, and a conclusion. This structure will enhance the logical flow of your arguments.
examples
Use specific examples to support each advantage and disadvantage you mention. General statements are less effective than concrete examples illustrating your points.
clarity
Work on clarity and precision in your writing. Avoid vague statements and aim for clear, direct expression of your ideas. This includes refining your grammar and vocabulary.
grammar
Check for typographical and grammatical errors. Proofreading your work can significantly improve the overall quality and readability of your essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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